What do you think of this poem i wrote im onley 13....?

I can鈥檛 get over the way I feel every time I open my eyes.


I feel so alone, so lost, so scared.


The way he yells and screams.


My life that was good seems so long ago.


Now I awake and I鈥檓 scared that something is wrong, something is not right.





What if one day she feels like life is no longer worth it and decides to leave.


How I will get through the long bitter days of grief.


I wish some one was there to hold me, to tell me it will all be ok.


But how, when no one knows the silent pain I go through.





Maybe one day I鈥檒l awake in world with no violence, where I can feel accepted and loved.


But then I remember life isin鈥檛 a faerie tale.


Maybe if I wish a pond a star, I can leave and be, the one I truly wish to be.
What do you think of this poem i wrote im onley 13....?
YOU HAVE SOME VERY DEEP LINES...BUT VERY VERY GOOD POEM...
What do you think of this poem i wrote im onley 13....?
That is really good, but on the last line, do you mean "wish upon a star"? But other than that it was really well written. If you are writing this about yourself, I'm sorry you are going through a hard time now. But on the other hand you are a very talented writer. I would keep writing if I were you because as you grow you can write even better.
Reply:so major deep but i gots to ask why did you put it in the fashion part?
Reply:It is a good start to a long career of writing.


If the subject is from your imagination it is well thought out.


If it is from reality, you are not alone; you are a child of God and God loves you unconditionally.


If you need someone to talk to who is not part of the madness, send me an email.
Reply:lol the phrase is "wish upon a star".





I think it is good, but I have heard so many poems that sound similar to this one.





Try to make it your own..get even more specific.





:)